Re: THE TOUCH
Posted by Nick D on July 07, 2006 at 07:59:56:
In Reply to: Re: THE TOUCH posted by Thanatos on July 06, 2006 at 00:36:24:
Help me on this, Thana. Are you suggesting that stanza divisions, eg., after the third line and after "And he will never understand" would make it more readable? Also, what about that "rhythmical pulsations" thing? When I first wrote it, I thought the phrase was a good example of bad sophomoric heat, but now it seems to belong and I can't think of anything better.