Re: Words
Posted by Wil on February 12, 2006 at 01:10:19:
In Reply to: Words posted by BlueTattoo on February 11, 2006 at 23:10:51:
I like what came before the colon. The three stanzas before it flow well, after, not as well. After the colon (I suppose necessarily) the poem becomes "listy" and filled with cliches. There are definitely parts to the rest that aren't cliches, and those are the parts that should be salvaged. However, this needs some paring down and probably a tighter focus on the images that you've presented.