Re: Where Will I lie When I Am Gone
Posted by Jason The Bastard on January 12, 2006 at 04:27:32:
In Reply to: Where Will I lie When I Am Gone posted by Nick D on January 09, 2006 at 09:10:27:
A nice reflective piece. Most can't help but wonder what the survivors of our passing will make of us or how we'll be recieved in our departure. If you've lived a remotely interesting life then there can't help but be some doubt!
My only 2 little points are (1) the unnessessary indentation--If you're not using it to highlite a rhyme scheme it is extrenuous, and (2)the end of L4 of S2: "the peace we longed for in our life;" should the end word be "lives"? This broke the flow a little for me.
Good write on the whole,
JTB