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Posted by Nick D on November 20, 2005 at 21:10:59:

This is how you eat
An ice-cream cone, she whispers,
Her tongue and lips caressing mine
In strokes so languorous
They wipe my mind away
From the tickety-tick
Sound of her heels
Crossing a polished marble floor.


I'm really wondering about that word "languorous,"
yet unable to bring myself to use anything more precise.
Your thoughts would be appreciated


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