Posted by Temptress on October 19, 1999 at 12:33:03:
In Reply to: Poetic Masterbation posted by Angela S. on October 19, 1999 at 06:08:55:
This poem seems to have a dreamy effect to it, but kind of takes a plunge at the word "dildo". Also, if your stanzas were a little less wordy then it will follow a more soft erotic flow..Perhaps a little dreamy rhythm would happen.
: ) Over all...It was a good start, but needs to be a little more subtle to accomplish erotic.
Also, I'm not one for critiquing on spelling errors, but since its your title its important. It is spelled...Masturbation. : )