Posted by Juliann on February 15, 1999 at 20:11:24:
In Reply to: Nosefratu posted by Atrocifix on February 15, 1999 at 19:11:57:
I liked the last line of this one. Real succinct, effective. I like economy in the poems I read (and I guess what I write). I like the short lines and the quick meter of this piece.
I think the first section could be reworked or eliminated even. "Out for blood" and "drink you blood" are a little redundant, especially so close together.
Have you ever heard the song, "Red Right Hand" by Nick Cave and the Bad Seeds? I really recommend it if you haven't.