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- Friends(The Necrophilliac Story) - Cemetery of Eden 08:54:47 2/19/99
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- "virgin" - Jfreak 23:36:11 2/16/99
(3)
- Last Night - Sarah 15:37:32 2/16/99
(0)
- fluttering around without aim - Ana Ng 15:35:49 2/16/99
(1)
- Reality, please - Oklahoma 05:48:42 2/16/99
(7)
- The day my heart spoke - Spud 22:53:18 2/15/99
(2)
- Apple - Edith 21:32:41 2/15/99
(2)
- me without you (a sappy love poem *sigh* I am hopeless) - Maya 20:42:48 2/15/99
(5)
- Realization - Six 20:42:23 2/15/99
(3)
- Barren - Juliann 19:45:46 2/15/99
(2)
- Razor - Chelle 19:23:10 2/15/99
(1)
- Consuming Ferocity - David Rutledge 19:18:53 2/15/99
(1)
- Nosefratu - Atrocifix 19:11:57 2/15/99
(7)
- Forgive Me Father, For I Have Sinned - Pastorman 19:10:09 2/15/99
(2)
- Dog's Command - Atrocifix 19:02:01 2/15/99
(0)
- looking at a yellow rose - Squirrel 18:43:53 2/15/99
(3)
- Song - jilly 18:21:45 2/15/99
(4)
- Lusting the Ice Moon - Jade 18:01:32 2/15/99
(0)
- And Why Does the Green Polar Bear Speak? - Ryan 17:52:59 2/15/99
(0)
- Why Can't I Find Any Superheroes? - Ryan 17:45:09 2/15/99
(1)
- Why Can't I Walk through the Closed Door? - Ryan 17:42:37 2/15/99
(2)
- THE JUMPER'S EYES (kinda bored and experimenting) - brian long 16:11:30 2/15/99
(7)
- June 1998 - Sarah... 15:40:29 2/15/99
(3)
- Edith (repost) - Jade 15:04:28 2/15/99
(4)
- The Fragility of My Pieces - Oklahoma 14:31:02 2/15/99
(2)
- Madness in the Time of War - Oklahoma 14:20:59 2/15/99
(2)
- Morbid Thoughts at a Cafe on Saint Germain - Oklahoma 14:03:07 2/15/99
(1)
- Crowns - Willy 14:02:19 2/15/99
(1)
- Life's highs - . (c 14:02:13 2/15/99
(0)
- Capital Throne(A Tribute to Bertha) - Atrocifix 13:44:10 2/15/99
(4)
- Nothing Lasts Forever - Melissa E. Winkler 13:16:52 2/15/99
(2)
- Gerbils- the horror - James Bowie 12:33:37 2/15/99
(19)
- I Still Feel Lucky - Ralph 12:26:42 2/15/99
(3)
- Razor - Chelle 12:20:21 2/15/99
(0)
- Lifting Lazarus - Jade 12:05:52 2/15/99
(8)
- reflections - Sarah 11:55:13 2/15/99
(3)
- Life Afterlife - Wendy 08:41:43 2/15/99
(1)
- Do you feel beautiful? - James Bowie 07:58:00 2/15/99
(1)
- Dream Lover - Ruth 06:56:46 2/15/99
(2)
- Heaven's Gate (rewrite) - Tommy Q. 05:20:06 2/15/99
(2)
- February fourteenth (at day's end) - Red Letter 21:35:41 2/14/99
(6)
- Flirting With Inspiration - Angel With a Broken Wing 21:07:13 2/14/99
(3)
- Ode to the Scroll - Ana Ng 18:30:07 2/14/99
(0)
- ~poisoned tongues~ - Maya 17:51:29 2/14/99
(3)
- Spontaneous Combustion - Wendy 16:38:45 2/14/99
(4)
- The Day is Almost Over (A continuation) - Sarah 15:50:04 2/14/99
(2)
- Heaven's Gate - Tommy Q. 13:37:54 2/14/99
(2)
- Sponge - Curtis 12:25:00 2/14/99
(1)
- Determined Youth - Lad in Need 11:58:23 2/14/99
(0)
- A Tear in Love - Cora 11:40:55 2/14/99
(2)
- Pieces of Love - Child's heart 11:40:33 2/14/99
(0)
- In God's Kitchen - Mark Hansfield 11:10:04 2/14/99
(0)
- Gardening(My Vocation in Life) - AngelFace 10:51:40 2/14/99
(0)
- My True Home - LeroyBrown 10:48:49 2/14/99
(2)
- A Sunshine Valentine Triolet (with just a little cheating) - Ron Carnell 10:17:37 2/14/99
(9)
- I Found God Today - Tommy Q. 10:01:00 2/14/99
(4)
- in the spirit of the day, a valentine's sonnet to go with nan's villanelle (anyone up for a triolet?) - jilly 08:41:07 2/14/99
(8)
- AShara8AnaAng'sX - Short BUS 08:37:26 2/14/99
(2)
- Love is special heres my heart - Atrocifix 08:37:14 2/14/99
(7)
- V day mood - Lawn Chair 07:48:48 2/14/99
(1)
- Something for Valentines' Day - E.E.Biller 07:01:34 2/14/99
(0)
- FRIENDS or LOVERS (A Valentine Villanelle) - Nan 06:57:30 2/14/99
(6)
- Three in the Morning (continuation of Two in the Morning) - Sarah (#2) 05:45:32 2/14/99
(2)
- where were we? - bernard 03:34:57 2/14/99
(1)
- Soldier...,You Hide In My Heart...... - Amrutha 00:59:49 2/14/99
(10)
- I LOVE - Atroifixi 00:57:39 2/14/99
(2)
- All My Friends - John McGuinness 00:53:51 2/14/99
(2)
- the convergence of past and future - Ana Ng 00:23:11 2/14/99
(4)
- Two in the Morning (Happy Valentine's Day) - Sarah 00:03:38 2/14/99
(4)
- 'End Of Winter' - Imaginee 22:45:14 2/13/99
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- Dreams comming true - Atroifix 21:43:24 2/13/99
(5)
- Im turning one of my works into a song and I could use some advice for what I have so far. Thanks for anything! - E. S. Rein 21:36:49 2/13/99
(2)
- Santa V - Benedict Pike 21:27:14 2/13/99
(1)
- Powder White - Six 20:02:53 2/13/99
(0)
- For X)Angel(X and Colin - A Friend 19:14:33 2/13/99
(3)
- I'm starting MRAAMLA, wanna join? - John McGuinness 18:21:08 2/13/99
(9)
- as the misty cloud rises - Ana Ng 17:44:33 2/13/99
(1)
- Woman (God's Screenplay) - phillipe 17:31:39 2/13/99
(3)
- Faces of Heaven - Raggedy Annie 17:28:05 2/13/99
(3)
- it happens every time - Ana Ng 17:21:37 2/13/99
(1)
- Self Tribute - Lew Cypher 15:47:16 2/13/99
(6)
- Plaisire d'amoure - Artwolf 14:53:14 2/13/99
(3)
- Once Dead - Atrocifix 14:26:46 2/13/99
(10)
- To Atrocifix - iodine 14:01:50 2/13/99
(11)
- Ahh, Love (How appropriate) - Olivia 13:30:03 2/13/99
(3)
- GYPSY WHALES - brian long 13:26:07 2/13/99
(9)
- To Mother - Bambi Cohen 10:45:34 2/13/99
(0)
- Carpe Diem - Cora 10:11:50 2/13/99
(2)
- A Shakespearean Question to My Reflection - Cora 10:07:42 2/13/99
(5)
- toasty - Ana Ng 09:40:59 2/13/99
(2)
- January 24, 1999 (another one for Jack) - Cora 08:45:18 2/13/99
(0)
- Nothing More - E.E.Biller 08:35:05 2/13/99
(0)
- Mother - cheska 07:09:11 2/13/99
(1)
- Monkey-circus! - Arul Madhavan 51/2yrs KG student, Dubai. 07:03:25 2/13/99
(3)
- PICTURE PERFECT - Amrutha 06:42:50 2/13/99
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- poetry - Amrutha 06:18:00 2/13/99
(2)
- human atom IX - bernard 03:09:23 2/13/99
(2)
- I Love My Friends - Huck Finn 23:56:41 2/12/99
(1)
- A Valentine Song - Atrocifix 22:42:18 2/12/99
(4)
- Monarchy through Bloodshed - Atrocifix 21:50:46 2/12/99
(4)
- Need help on punctuation and title please - xanaveive 20:32:45 2/12/99
(2)
- the apostate's creed - jilly 20:30:24 2/12/99
(3)
- Pares Cum Paribus - Cora 18:54:31 2/12/99
(24)
- Twice Times Ten - Dube /DG 18:26:16 2/12/99
(2)
- Hymnus ad Europam - Atrocifix 17:32:32 2/12/99
(2)
- Coming of Age - Cora 16:44:57 2/12/99
(4)
- [[[Barrio Fiesta]]] needs help from Spanish speakers - A. Brown 16:26:40 2/12/99
(4)
- Aurora (criticism is, of course, welcome) - Ryan 16:05:47 2/12/99
(3)
- Observer of Evil - Atrocifix 15:20:44 2/12/99
(4)
- I melt for flowers - xallanthia 14:44:37 2/12/99
(16)
- Killing Species - Atrocifix 14:22:44 2/12/99
(0)
- Priestly Class - Atrocifix 14:19:07 2/12/99
(6)
- Pick Roses - Cora 14:02:57 2/12/99
(3)
- ~*A Letter Never Meant to be Sent*~ ("I just wanted to tell you") - Raggedy Annie 14:01:40 2/12/99
(2)
- My Husband - Tricia 13:58:20 2/12/99
(2)
- Donor Valentine - Wendy 12:13:55 2/12/99
(7)
- Oh, to be a Camel cigarette - Neptune 11:17:32 2/12/99
(6)
- handwriting - metrixx 08:28:28 2/12/99
(2)
- "buns" - Donald Windrom 07:17:11 2/12/99
(6)
- "poplife" - Donald Windrom 07:06:40 2/12/99
(1)
- "The Death of A Poet Don Killuminati(1966-1999) - Donald Windrom 06:58:28 2/12/99
(24)
- I LOVE HIM - SJW 06:15:27 2/12/99
(1)
- you are so good for me---i think - Chiquita 22:25:30 2/11/99
(1)
- Killing Species - Abysser 21:17:15 2/11/99
(1)
- Just a quick note to say... - JP 21:10:05 2/11/99
(2)
- Moramay - phillipe 20:19:44 2/11/99
(1)
- Why must I be tortured? - Woolus 19:14:28 2/11/99
(1)
- Haiku Adeui - Chocolate Bunny 19:13:43 2/11/99
(4)
- Blue Lunatic - i.b.emma 19:08:00 2/11/99
(1)
- Help me with my Pain - CrossedBuns 18:58:39 2/11/99
(2)
- "COMPASSION" - Michele Kalish 17:43:32 2/11/99
(2)
- The day that the rain came..... - Artwolf 17:38:56 2/11/99
(4)
- I Died Today - JP 15:58:24 2/11/99
(8)
- I know you - Leanne 15:36:08 2/11/99
(4)
- My heart says it will... (for Valentine's) - Squirrel 15:08:57 2/11/99
(2)
- I didn't know. - Leanne 15:04:49 2/11/99
(1)
- Little Angel - Leanne 15:02:59 2/11/99
(1)
- Next - C Miller 14:39:42 2/11/99
(1)
- Sexy Relations - TonyS. 14:16:25 2/11/99
(3)
- TELL THE CHILD - Poeteer 14:14:21 2/11/99
(1)
- YOUR SMILE - C Miller 12:38:25 2/11/99
(2)
- __Part_Time_Time_Thieves_ - C Miller 12:27:57 2/11/99
(1)
- Can You? - Destiny 12:15:03 2/11/99
(4)
- Valentine Historia - Wendy 11:56:49 2/11/99
(2)
- I AM - JP - with much help from beautiful Red 11:31:09 2/11/99
(2)
- Re: I AM - Red Letter 16:54:33 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: I AM - Wendy 12:35:35 2/11/99
(0)
- MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - brian long 11:24:16 2/11/99
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- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Dennis Greene 18:55:14 2/12/99
(0)
- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - James Bowie 05:24:58 2/12/99
(0)
- Oh Brian, my Brian... - JP 21:07:16 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Sarah 20:33:26 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - i.b. 19:21:50 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Ruth 19:19:59 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Michele Kalish 17:55:35 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Red Letter 17:39:14 2/11/99
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- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Tricia 15:49:04 2/11/99
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- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Wendy 12:39:06 2/11/99
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- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Nan 12:09:18 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - Cindy 11:56:53 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: MY PERFECT, PERFECT CHILD - crystal 11:56:39 2/11/99
(0)
- Epitaph - Prufrock 11:17:44 2/11/99
(6)
- To Tell Her "I LOve You" - B.J.Trump 11:04:14 2/11/99
(0)
- Slain and Lost - Abysser 10:45:29 2/11/99
(0)
- Perhaps In Another Life - Shereamore Rath 09:51:27 2/11/99
(4)
- Blue Eyes - iodine 09:43:42 2/11/99
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- She has Many - SJW 09:00:43 2/11/99
(1)
- "Epilogue" - Anaxagoras 08:54:12 2/11/99
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- Band of Gold - Ruth 07:33:51 2/11/99
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- Night and the Dagger - Dennis Greene (the Younger) 07:25:52 2/11/99
(3)
- trail of kisses - Maya the illusionist 06:40:43 2/11/99
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- come and visit - feedback needed - thanks! - Beth 06:39:11 2/11/99
(0)
- Dauphins in the Midnight sea - Kittins 22:43:51 2/10/99
(3)
- "Look At Our Surroundings" - A. Brown 22:23:15 2/10/99
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- parchment (or the birth of a poem) - Maya the illusionist 20:54:05 2/10/99
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- Daughters of Night - Angel With a Broken Wing 20:37:22 2/10/99
(0)
- Spirits of Pestilence - Abysser 18:53:27 2/10/99
(1)
- Funeral Song(Mourners Deceived) - Atrocifix 18:18:26 2/10/99
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- Altar beyond the Dark - Atrocifix 18:02:20 2/10/99
(3)
- [[[ Indreams ]]] - A. Brown 17:59:17 2/10/99
(1)
- Tell her I love her - Artwolf 17:06:17 2/10/99
(5)
- Untitled (Another one! Augh!) :) - Sarah 16:47:01 2/10/99
(1)
- Masking the World - Three 16:46:48 2/10/99
(2)
- REN (true story) - Brian and Merrie Long 16:28:52 2/10/99
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- Melancholia (i dug this up for ruth) - Prufrock 15:56:00 2/10/99
(8)
- Missing in Action - Dube 15:24:26 2/10/99
(3)
- Fourth of July - Chiquita 15:19:26 2/10/99
(2)
- Zephyr - xallanthia 14:47:39 2/10/99
(2)
- "womderin" - Donald Windrom 14:06:16 2/10/99
(2)
- No War Crimes - Atrocifix 13:28:10 2/10/99
(1)
- Falling in Love - Woolus 13:07:39 2/10/99
(2)
- Human Blue Book - i.b.emma 12:55:56 2/10/99
(2)
- Where am I? - Cindy 12:27:40 2/10/99
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- 30 - Juliann 12:05:10 2/10/99
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- Re: 30 - phillipe 06:36:56 2/11/99
(0)
- Re: 30 - Red Letter 16:47:16 2/10/99
(0)
- Re: 30 - Wendy 13:06:06 2/10/99
(0)
- Arachnaphobia - Wendy 11:02:14 2/10/99
(2)
- Wondering - Ralph 10:45:27 2/10/99
(1)
- Wondering - alexia 09:58:42 2/10/99
(4)
- Violent Joy - JP 09:24:33 2/10/99
(2)
- Lullaby for a Good Friday - jilly 09:16:24 2/10/99
(1)
- "urban fiend" part2 - Donald Windrom 09:14:23 2/10/99
(0)
- "snake in the grass" - Donald Windrom 08:58:52 2/10/99
(2)
- "Trial Damagers" - Donald Windrom 08:53:05 2/10/99
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- Never - Rob 08:19:54 2/10/99
(2)
- The Next Bend - Tommy Q. 07:41:33 2/10/99
(2)
- A Cult By Any Other Name - phillipe 07:31:10 2/10/99
(7)
- Just Nothing - Sarah 06:17:53 2/10/99
(1)
- Self-Defense - James Bowie 06:02:25 2/10/99
(2)
- Mom's Letter - Tommy Q. 05:57:32 2/10/99
(2)
- A REVOLVING DOOR - Larry Mathews 22:33:10 2/09/99
(4)
- Hands to Kill - Atrocifix 22:12:21 2/09/99
(1)
- I'd Be Her................ - Maya the illusionist 21:02:46 2/09/99
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- When the Kingdom Comes - jilly 20:01:59 2/09/99
(7)
- the valley of the bones - jilly 20:00:24 2/09/99
(5)
- ---saccharin--- - Maya the illusionist 19:28:51 2/09/99
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- Little Sips - SJW 18:41:58 2/09/99
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- "Soil" - Kayumanggi 18:32:49 2/09/99
(3)
- 45 seconds - Ana Ng 18:18:03 2/09/99
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- pure terror - Ana Ng 18:13:55 2/09/99
(1)
- illogical fear - Ana Ng 17:55:28 2/09/99
(1)
- Ducks (just handed in today) - Nan 17:40:18 2/09/99
(2)
- My Trip to Heaven - Chiquita 14:46:38 2/09/99
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- House of Doom (A ghost story) - Tommy Q. 13:41:16 2/09/99
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- title? hmmm...... here's a temp. one: "MellonCollie Thoughts" as for a not so temp. one, how bout you guys help me out on that part of it, too - Raggedy Annie 13:06:22 2/09/99
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- Circus Music (repost from last page) - Raggedy Annie 13:00:13 2/09/99
(1)
- Together - JP 12:23:39 2/09/99
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- Enraged - JP 12:22:15 2/09/99
(1)
- Moonlight Serenade - JP 12:19:13 2/09/99
(7)
- Burning Hate (an older work) - JP 12:17:21 2/09/99
(1)
- I Love You - Ralph 12:16:49 2/09/99
(3)
- Chaos (Part II) - Rob 12:06:39 2/09/99
(3)
- "Bitches Brew" Part2 - Donald Windrom 12:04:11 2/09/99
(1)
- Loneliness and Mockery - Sylvia 12:01:07 2/09/99
(1)
- "first" - Donald Windrom 11:54:41 2/09/99
(1)
- Separately My Eyes - Sylvia 11:52:51 2/09/99
(2)
- Searching for Arrowheads - Wendy 11:51:26 2/09/99
(7)
- "Harlem" - Donald Windrom 11:49:53 2/09/99
(3)
- After Rape (REPOST w/edits) - Niki 09:57:02 2/09/99
(4)
- "Beast" - Donald Windrom 07:06:05 2/09/99
(2)
- A Daughter's Prayer - Tommy Q. 07:04:34 2/09/99
(1)
- "Eulogy for A King" - Donald Windrom 06:58:28 2/09/99
(1)
- Last Stop Before Heaven - Tommy Q. 05:50:51 2/09/99
(4)
- Inner me still alive after living the HATE of this world - Chiquita 21:41:24 2/08/99
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- A Silent Abbetor - heather 20:55:12 2/08/99
(2)
- you tell me...please?! - Auroura 19:42:30 2/08/99
(8)
- Today Its Raining (revised slightly) - TonyS. 18:38:03 2/08/99
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- Shame - ML 18:31:01 2/08/99
(2)
- Three Days Dead(Reading the story again I couldn't resist writing this) - Atrocifix 17:17:17 2/08/99
(6)
- Death knew there would be two.... - Imaginee 17:05:01 2/08/99
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- Stacked Deck (Chapter II) - heather 17:03:45 2/08/99
(2)
- Stacked Deck (a repost) - heather 17:01:22 2/08/99
(1)
- I fall - poseiden's nymph 16:49:31 2/08/99
(2)
- You Ask Yourself - Sarah 16:19:16 2/08/99
(3)
- Have You Ever Watched the Sunset - sweetpoison 16:14:11 2/08/99
(6)
- Climb on the Wind - Dube 15:25:44 2/08/99
(6)
- Moonlight Glow - Imaginee 13:47:49 2/08/99
(4)
- The Children's Museum - Wendy 13:33:54 2/08/99
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- Coexistence, or close your eyes - Sylvia 13:06:05 2/08/99
(4)
- Break free - crystal 12:57:37 2/08/99
(5)
- Untitled (you know??) - Imaginee 12:35:09 2/08/99
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